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Wednesday, 22 May 2019

The Hook.

A girl or boy is bullied in P.E class.

Before i could even leave i heard crying coming from the boys changing room. Knowing i couldn't go in the boys room i said to myself "Be quick, run in and out". I walk towards the door and quietly open with one hand. I see the sulking boy and walk to him. He tells me he had been bullied during a P.E session not long ago. 

2 comments:

  1. I think it was really good. It made me never want to stop reading it. I think you should write the rest of the story instead of just the hook because it would be an amazing story.

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  2. Thanks for your opinion. Didn't have as much time to finish the rest but next time.




    Tena rawa atu koe

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